i love, love sweet daejae, and this was so sweet. the boys feel so real in this story, like the real dae and jae were actually a prince and his devoted servant (which fit your surprise ending well). i felt that was a really smart choice of past lives actually! there's something refined about Jae that fits a prince well, and we all know dae is a humble, bighearted, boisterious busan boy :) i actually loved this line you gave Dae:
"Daehyun may not have gotten an education in reading or writing, but his mother taught him to do everything with a willing and subservient heart"
That is so Daehyun, and one of the best things about him. As for Jae, I loved how quiet and calm he was, and how he was unafraid to be matter-of-fact about reality and look for his memories where Dae was too afraid (such a complimentary pair). This was my favourite Jae part:
"Youngjae doesn’t say anything, but there are inexplicable emotions etched in the folds of his frown. He places a hand over Daehyun’s, and they remain in the middle of the field for a long time."
I think Youngjae can be really "still waters run deep" like that, and it's something I don't see enough of in fic. <3
Finally, i love the world you created. the description of the souls are gorgeous, and i like the logic of how everything works. this particular passage got me:
"There is a moment right on the border of life and death as the soul leaves the body that Reapers can slip in and take over. It’s the only chance they get to experience a bit of life, no matter how instantaneously it fades."
This is kinda personal, but I've experienced depression before - I couldn't feel anything most of the time, but when I did, i cried like Dae. so that passage was very poignant for me.
This was a wonderful job, it gave me so many feels :D I'm gonna post more of my favourite quotes in the next comment, but for now, love!
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i love, love sweet daejae, and this was so sweet. the boys feel so real in this story, like the real dae and jae were actually a prince and his devoted servant (which fit your surprise ending well). i felt that was a really smart choice of past lives actually! there's something refined about Jae that fits a prince well, and we all know dae is a humble, bighearted, boisterious busan boy :) i actually loved this line you gave Dae:
That is so Daehyun, and one of the best things about him. As for Jae, I loved how quiet and calm he was, and how he was unafraid to be matter-of-fact about reality and look for his memories where Dae was too afraid (such a complimentary pair). This was my favourite Jae part:
I think Youngjae can be really "still waters run deep" like that, and it's something I don't see enough of in fic. <3
Finally, i love the world you created. the description of the souls are gorgeous, and i like the logic of how everything works. this particular passage got me:
This is kinda personal, but I've experienced depression before - I couldn't feel anything most of the time, but when I did, i cried like Dae. so that passage was very poignant for me.
This was a wonderful job, it gave me so many feels :D I'm gonna post more of my favourite quotes in the next comment, but for now, love!